自荐信写作中的细节问题

　　写求职信的目的在于获得职位，一封求职信无论如何文辞并茂，令人心动，公司HR主管不见到应聘者本人是不会给予工作机会的。因此，求职信的实际目的在于获得面谈的机会。许多人都会copy网上的求职信范本，导致千篇一律，这是非常不可取的。我们已经讲过怎样写求职信，这次我们来谈谈求职信写作中容易被忽略的细节问题。

　　一、求职信的第一段说明写信的目的，有些专家认为不宜用分词句子，比如用下面的句子做开头，因为这样的句子被人用得大多，显得陈腐，失去特点。

　　Replying to your advertisement...

　　Answering your advertisement...

　　Believing that there is an opportunity...

　　Thinking that there is a vacancy in your company...

　　Having read your ad...

　　再比较下面三组例句。每一组里面(1)句较差，经过修改后(2)句显得比较恰当。

　　A:

　　(1) Replying to your recent advertisement in the Boston Evening Globe, I wish to apply for the position of sales manager.

　　(2) I am applying for the position of sales manager. I believe my qualifications will meet your exacting requirements.

　　B:

　　(1) I believe after reading your advertisement in this morning's Journal that you are offering just the opportunity I am looking for.

　　(2) Your advertisement in this morning's Journal for an adjustment manager prompted me to apply for this position.

　　C:

　　(1) Having read your advertisement in the New York Times for an accountant, I thought you might be interested in my application.

　　(2) In your advertisement for an accountant, you indicated that you require the services of a competent person, with thorough training in the field of cost accounting. Please consider me an applicant for the position. Here are my reasons for believing I am qualified for this work.

　　二、在提到希望得到的待遇时，可用类似的句子：

　　I'd prefer not to set a salary, but since you ask, I consider 6,500 a month to be satisfactory.

　　It's hard for me to say what my salary should be set at, but if pressed I would have to ask for a month as an initial salary.

　　I don't feel that I should set my own salary, as I am happy enough to have the privilege of working for you.　　　　However, I would consider a month satisfactory compensation for my apprenticeship.

　　三、提起或要求待遇时不要过分谦虚或表示歉意，下列句子不宜使用：

　　As for salary, I do not know what to say. Would $4,500 a month be too much?

　　Do you think I would be asking too much if I said 5,000 dollars a month?

　　You know what my services are worth better than I do. All I want is a living wage.

　　四、关于求职信的结尾用语，下面也有三组例句。每一组里面(1)句较差，经过修改后(2)句显得比较恰当。

　　A:

　　(1)软弱、羞怯的：If you think I can fill the position after you have read my letter, I shall be glad to talk with you.

　　(2)改写后(较佳)：If my qualifications meet your standards, I would be happy to speak with you in person.

　　B:

　　(1)怀疑，不妥、不安全的：If you are interested, please let me know immediately, as I'm sure an interview will convince you I'm the man for the job.

　　(2)改写后：I would like to request an interview. You can reach me by telephone at Beijing 123456 between the hours of 7-9 a.m. and 5:30-9:30p.m. any evening.

　　C:

　　(1)哀求式的句子，不够完整(漏掉面谈时间)：I would appreciate the opportunity for an interview. I can be reached by calling Beijing 12345678.

　　(2)改写后：May I have the opportunity to discuss this matter further with you? My telephone number is Beijing 12345678. You can reach me between nine and five o'clock during the day.